It's Over

hey there!
This was so sweet... even if the point wasn't to be sweet
Anyway, this was good, it was like a first teenager love, and getting over with it.
I liked it :D

I may feel like I'll cry,

but I'm sure I'll be okay.

I'm better off now,

now that you're far away.

A bit cliche, but i liked this on the most
Keep writing!

Bailey Holcomb wrote:I can't stay together
with someone like you,
You don't care about me.
You care about you.

This is what you've been waiting for.
I can already tell.
There are other girls that like you,
and you want them instead.

I'm sorry that you'r a pig,
can't stay with one girl.
I thought I was yours,
when you were my world.

Now that it's over,
it's done and through.
Though you I will miss,
I can't stay with you.

I may feel like I'll cry,
but I'm sure I'll be okay.
I'm better off now,
now that you're far away.


-Bailey Holcomb

this is one of the most beautiful things that ive ever read. it sounds a lot like reality.

Ah, Bailey... *crying* That was so sweet and so sad. Beautiful, beautiful. I give you a gold star.

I'm sorry that you'r a pig,
can't stay with one girl.
I thought I was yours,
when you were my world.

I love the metaphor here. It made me laugh. That typo there annoys me a bit too, so I thought that I would point it out for you.

Good job!